I remember when I first met johnny, he had big black eyes and a dark tanned face, his hair was jet-black and heavily greased and combed to the side. Johnny was the pet (would you call your friend a 'pet' at their funeral?) of the gang everyones kid brother.
Johnny had no real family, we were his family, the gang was there for Johnny if he needed a place to stay he was always welcome. Johnny was like a little brother in the gang, everyone cared so much about Johnny. Johnny made the gang stay together, he got along with the gang. (using the word 'gang' too much, can you think of another word to use?)
Johnny was a true friend, he cared about his friends alot. Johnny would care about what ever you tell him, he would listen what you have to say. If you were upset johhnny would always be there.
Johnny really loved the book called, " Gone With The Wind". He would always ask me if I could read the book. Johnny loved the gang. He was always with the gang. (The last two sentences sound like they have been added on without any real connection to the previous sentences plus you have mentioned these points already in previous paragraphs)
Johnny cared deeply for his friends, he always there for the gang and he cared about the guys.(again repeating what you have said above) Johnny was always there for me. when something would happen to me Johnny would be there for me and made sure I was ok.
I will best remember Johnny as a young brave boy, he put his life on a hook (on the line) to save those kids in the church.
Johnny had no real family, we were his family, the gang was there for Johnny if he needed a place to stay he was always welcome. Johnny was like a little brother in the gang, everyone cared so much about Johnny. Johnny made the gang stay together, he got along with the gang. (using the word 'gang' too much, can you think of another word to use?)
Johnny was a true friend, he cared about his friends alot. Johnny would care about what ever you tell him, he would listen what you have to say. If you were upset johhnny would always be there.
Johnny really loved the book called, " Gone With The Wind". He would always ask me if I could read the book. Johnny loved the gang. He was always with the gang. (The last two sentences sound like they have been added on without any real connection to the previous sentences plus you have mentioned these points already in previous paragraphs)
Johnny cared deeply for his friends, he always there for the gang and he cared about the guys.(again repeating what you have said above) Johnny was always there for me. when something would happen to me Johnny would be there for me and made sure I was ok.
I will best remember Johnny as a young brave boy, he put his life on a hook (on the line) to save those kids in the church.
Great to see you have posted your work Courtland. Try to get back to it to edit your work.
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